Sucked into the Fanfic Author Void!

[zoupzuop2]

Hey folks!
So, over the last (recently became) three years, I've been scribbling and writing in my li'l "writing journal", with the chaptering and necessity of a Ranma ½ fanfiction. I've begun to post the chapters I've typed up from the original manuscript, and right now I'm about to put up the seventh chapter.
So, please! Commentary, critique, compliments, bribes, money... whatever you'd like to give!

http://www.fanfiction.net/~zoupzuop2

So far my reviews have proven pretty nice... anything I could work on?